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Far more depressive than it should be,
poverty as far as the eye can see.
Down from below watching misery nest.
Am I the lord or am I the pest?

Cannot forget and cannot digress,
what is a life, if it is a mess?
A taste on the tongue, more sour than lime.
Should I just kill myself or keep killing time?

My life, my fate, must be adjusted,
for wealth, for power I have lusted.
But it all took a walk right down the drain,
this day but shattered dreams remain.

For now the only way is down,
faithless, hopeless with a frown.
Poverty as far as the eye can see.
Nothing is good enough for me.
©2008-2009 ~Sairex636
:iconsairex636:

Author's Comments

Ok here is the story. I am a member of a gaming forum, that forum has a little corner for writers. At the writers corner I joined a Poetry Shop. It's a thread where people post requests on what poems they want a poet to write, they name the title, theme, scheme etc.

So this is my first request (requested by Eukara) which was very challenging because I am not used to this topic (not to mention I got the topic all wrong and it was supposed to be about something differemt).

After reading it she said this is my best poem yet and that apearently us poets should be challenged more to write perfection.

Writing this poem was hard and the fact that it is so short makes me feel kinda...stupid because I always thought that literary art was more about intellect, not talent. Save talent and other randomness to those peasents of Visual Art hahahaha!

Where was I going with this? ...Enjoy!

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:iconxxlostbutterflyxx:
:claps:
Your poetry still dazzles me
I can visualize alot in this poem (its not pretty) but it's alive

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Here’s to you and here’s to me, I pray that friends we’ll always be. But, if by chance, we disagree, the heck with you and here’s to me!
:iconsairex636:
Thanks I'm glad you like it. The unny thing is, none of my poems reflect any of my feelings. All of my work is pure imagination, while a majority of poets write about their feelings.

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See me to see what's inside a murderer's mind.
:iconfig-muffin:
"Am I the lord or am I the pest?"

My favorite line in the poem. You certainly didn't disapoint me with this poem, I agree with the girl that this is one of your best. I wish I could say more, but my brain's not working very well right now.

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What to do to an idiot:

:pee:
....... :brainless:

What to do if you're an idiot: :stupidme: or :reading:

Thank you.
:iconsairex636:
Thanks, man. I'll try to keep up the good work!

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See me to see what's inside a murderer's mind.
:iconmandyc:
awesome! Captures great emotion :D

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I love Patrick Hall more than we will ever know...
True love starts with a kiss.
DAMN IT!!!!! I lost a penny
:iconsairex636:
Thanks.

You know it's funny how none of my poems actually contain any of my own feelings in them...all imagination.

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See me to see what's inside a murderer's mind.
:iconwitheredlilies:
Very nicely written. Great flow to it. You're poetry is really amazing. Great job! ^^

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“I don’t ignore you. I just pretend I don’t hear you.”
- Dad
:iconsairex636:
Thank you!

I knew that Writers Club thing would pay off eventually.

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See me to see what's inside a murderer's mind.
:iconwitheredlilies:
Welcome! ^^

Haha...yeah, I'm waiting for it to pay off now too. XD

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“I don’t ignore you. I just pretend I don’t hear you.”
- Dad

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